It sounds like the same thing over and over.
I'm not trying to be mean, but you're going to have to hear this. It sounds like something I wrote when I was 12. The voices you choose are very cheesy sounding, and the whole song is about 6 different notes. I'm sure that you could get very good at music with PRACTICE and EXPERIMENTATION! Practice playing keyboard until your fingers fall off, and maybe try some different methods for songwriting. I would also recommend downloading/buying some type of music program/drum machine to create a more solid drum beat also. Good luck!